7. Fog Collection: Alternative Technology for Local Water Projects

Now it’s Your Turn

In the comments, please ask questions or make suggestions that will help the cartographer improve the map. Key things to think about include:

  • Does the map orient the viewer?
  • Does the data tell a story?
  • Does the map support the story being told?
  • Does the map make assumptions?
  • How could the map be more readable?
  • Are there any errors or typos?
  • John_H_Kelly

    Beautiful map, clearly showing the distribution of fog capture projects near arid zones; and, the two illustrations are helpful to explain this unfamiliar-to-most technology. A few English mistakes: The first sentence in the first yellow-box paragraph should start “Advection fog” (no “the,” and corrected spelling). The bullet points (“to fulfill,” etc.) should use something like a raised dot, not the symbol used in the map. The paragraph titled “Where” should start “Fog collection…” (again, no “the,” as in Italian). Finally, I would suggest left-justify for these paragraphs, rather than fill-justify.

  • Chuck Clark

    I agree with John. And, in order to make the paragraphing visually obvious, consider either indenting the first line of paragraphs or adding space between paragraphs. I enjoyed the Large Fog Collector image, but how does the water get from the “plastic mesh” into the “collection tank”?

  • sarah dorrance

    This is a very good map for someone like me who likes to build catchments and outdoor structures. 1st yellow box I would remove ‘to’ x3 from the front of your sentences. 2nd box 1st sentence remove ‘the’, capitalize ‘Fog’.
    2nd box Africa….) remove the word ‘but’.
    Under Effects, the first sentence confuses me and needs further development. The fog collection rate is green, what is the yellow line?

  • Bret Betnar

    The map orients the viewer, and everything is laid out well. I think the map could read better in terms of its use of color. There are a lot of light (higher chroma) colors within the map, so that the yellow water drops aren’t so visible. A possible solution could be to darken the oceans and temperate zones, so that the brownish gradients really stand out. You’d have to change the blue and green water drops to a lighter color, but right now they are visually similar. One question I have would be why are their large variations in amounts collected in different parts of the world with less fog events? That information would seem to really add to the story. Additionally, in the legend box, shouldn’t “temperate climate” be capitalized like all the rest? Again, great subject, and very nice map.

  • This is kinda of weak, just showing projects and some pros/cons

  • Aly DeGraff Ollivierre

    Your map is simple and easily understandable. My only comments would be to consider combining the legends and removing the yellow text blocks (as well as left-justifying the text). Your graphics are informative and supplement the map and text well, great job!

  • AD

    I like the overall layout of the map – a good combination of map, diagram, chart, and text. The map is helpful for getting a sense of the extent of fog collection, which I’ve only seen mentioned here or there before. I wonder if it would also be possible somehow without over-complexifying the map to also include some relief, since the potential for fog collection is, as mentioned in the text, greatest in mountainous coastal areas. This would enable readers to contrast the potential with what exists currently. Otherwise, this contribution looks nice and polished.

  • Daniel

    The text is very clear and orients one well to the project of fog collection, and demonstrating its scale. It is an ambitious idea, and with revolutionary potential. I wish it had integrated a more geographical component, beyond the very interesting relation of fog harvesting and deserts; perhaps this could be done in part by distinguishing projects/fog level in relation to mountainous areas/rainforest/coastal regions. This would be difficult, but enrich map; also wonder if the bars of collection and yield might be organized spatially on map, The images of the fog collectors and sketch of their positioning on mountains is wonderful, however, as the drawing; it contrasts nicely with the global map by being so local. Are these harvesters located on mountains, in general? The blue (drinking and domestic use) and green (reforestation) drops seems a bit dark and might better pop out if lightened, though you use light blue icon for water harvested. Might it make any sense to mark the relative success of harvesting water on map? This is a very cool project, and the huge benefits tell a fascinating story.

  • stephanie b

    I love the sketches! They add great context and visual interest. I agree with Daniel about the symbol coloring–lightening/brightening these a bit may help them stand out more from each other. I don’t think you need the blue drop shadow/offset effect–I find it a bit distracting. I think a soft, slight. glow of the same color might work better, or maybe leaving off the blue entirely. (although the blue does help tie the map in visually with the sketches, etc)